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Remorse in a ‘hello’


©J Hardy Carroll

Aaron had left abruptly, slamming the door as he went. Vanessa had begun shrieking again. She was upset and the fighting had drained her. He couldn’t handle it. Leaving was what he knew how to do best. Pretending nothing happened and hoping the black clouds would soon disappear restoring their relationship to the rainbows.

Vanessa knew it took effort and sacrifices. From both sides. Every good relationship, like a dance, required two equal partners going the same way. It was hard, but nothing good came easy.

He contemplated, then lifted the phone and dialled. Her ‘hello’ was filled with tears.


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14 thoughts on “Remorse in a ‘hello’

  1. At least they are making an effort. So that counts as a win. Good job on ending the tale with a slightly positive vibe.


  2. A harsh reality which requires a call to bring things back. Well done!


  3. Christine has read my mind. I think I have some free spaces in my counseling schedule next week 🙂

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  4. What a tangle of jumbled emotions! How on earth will they sort them out? I think I agree with Christine about the counselling…

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  5. gahlearner on said:

    Oh dear, one of these days the’ll not be able to reconcile. I can see the heat of their emotions, good story.

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  6. That can’t count as a good relationship, but maybe it’s a start.

    Great story. Come see mine here.

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  7. Someone needs relationship counseling here. Good portrayal of the emotions involved. Hope you can get them to work it out before they both get sick of the roller coaster. ☺

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