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31 May 2019
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A radical flee

©Susan Eames

He just got up one morning and left.

It’s not something you usually do without intensive planning or careful thought. But sometimes it’s what you need.

It’s when you disappear or something serious happens that you realise the true nature of the people around you, who cares for you and who are worthy of being a part of your life.

Ivan was so fed up with the futility and hypocrisy of his surroundings, he had to act radically.

Then the phone rang.

“Where are you?” the female voice sounded concerned.

“On a tree, gazing at the ocean,” he replied serene.

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17 thoughts on “A radical flee”

  1. Abhijit Ray on said:

    At least someone is worried about Ivan. Must be his wife, or mother.

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  2. Iain Kelly on said:

    I like his thinking… if only I could manage the same! 🙂

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  3. Margaret on said:

    Just a temporary escape then. I hope it does him some good. At least someone cares about him – that should cheer him up. Lovely story – we all feel like climbing a tree sometimes.

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  4. 4963andypop on said:

    You do what you gotta do. Makes me wonder where and who he was, before he became a tree-trunk philosopher.

    In the second para, i think it might flow better if you used “is” for both of the final clauses. For what its worth. 😊

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  5. gahlearner on said:

    Haha, so dramatic. At least now he knows she cares for him. Fun tale.

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  6. granonine on said:

    I’ve often wished I had a tree and a beach 🙂

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  7. Susan A Eames on said:

    I liked the atmosphere of this story. Nicely done.

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  8. James McEwan on said:

    Yes, tell him to cheer up and come home. Then again, if the view is septacular and the climate is warm, perhaps he is beeter where he is now, up a tree.

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  9. DB McNicol on said:

    Ahhh, good one but if I were truly getting away from everyone and everything, the phone would be tossed. LOL!

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